Very nice piece overall. I love your colour adjustments and various corrections. That being said please take the rest of this crit with a grain of salt and don't get the impression I didn't like it because I did.
First, the vignetting. I don't think that the darkened corners add anything to the image and altogether cheapen the effect. The reason to use it is a cheap effective way to add contrast to the corners, but when used it often looks amateurish.
Next, I'd like to see a better resolved composition. Despite all the upward motion of the piece, I find myself fairly constantly at the bottom as that's where the highest level of activity is. All-in-all, add some activity to the top edge of the piece or crop out a bit (yes I understand the blurred light sourcing but given the gravitational movement in the piece I still find there to be not enough power on the top to keep me there.)
To be really nit-picky, I could use a little more blurring on the dandelions in the back to give the appearance of a really shallow depth of field. I see some of the blurring already but still some are sharper than they need to be. You also might want to dodge the central dandelion a bit more so that it stands out from the background and really becomes a focal point. Don't go overboard but it could give it that little extra umph.
Besides those I think this is a nice photograph and I look forward to seeing your work in the future!
I know how bad people can be about critiquing work. It's really annoying when you want to get better and develop your style. Once again, good luck and have fun shooting!
Wow thats amazing how did you do the vingetting? I love it- it looks like you made a holga picture without the holga, how did you do it? Uhm.. I know this is advanced critique but I don't think there's anything I dislike about this one. perhaps the lighting it somewhat too orange-y yellow-y but in another sense the discoloration is really charming.
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I like the colors on this one. Also, it looks like all dandilions are staring into the sky, which I found charming. I love a little personification in nature.
Personally, I would have like to see a slightly sharper angle upwards.... With the stems more pronounced, but not nessicarily the focus... You know what I mean? Gah, this is what happens when a non-photographer tries to critique photographs. Also, I think the upper corners are too dark. They weigh down the top half of the image, and I don't get the feeling of "looking up" quite as much.
But overall an interesting piece. I'm glad you did something in photoshop without asking for my help. :>
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First, the vignetting. I don't think that the darkened corners add anything to the image and altogether cheapen the effect. The reason to use it is a cheap effective way to add contrast to the corners, but when used it often looks amateurish.
Next, I'd like to see a better resolved composition. Despite all the upward motion of the piece, I find myself fairly constantly at the bottom as that's where the highest level of activity is. All-in-all, add some activity to the top edge of the piece or crop out a bit (yes I understand the blurred light sourcing but given the gravitational movement in the piece I still find there to be not enough power on the top to keep me there.)
To be really nit-picky, I could use a little more blurring on the dandelions in the back to give the appearance of a really shallow depth of field. I see some of the blurring already but still some are sharper than they need to be. You also might want to dodge the central dandelion a bit more so that it stands out from the background and really becomes a focal point. Don't go overboard but it could give it that little extra umph.
Besides those I think this is a nice photograph and I look forward to seeing your work in the future!
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I personally thank you dude. I'll go out and retake this photography tomorrow and try again.
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I know how bad people can be about critiquing work. It's really annoying when you want to get better and develop your style. Once again, good luck and have fun shooting!
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Uhm.. I know this is advanced critique but I don't think there's anything I dislike about this one. perhaps the lighting it somewhat too orange-y yellow-y but in another sense the discoloration is really charming.
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Personally, I would have like to see a slightly sharper angle upwards.... With the stems more pronounced, but not nessicarily the focus... You know what I mean? Gah, this is what happens when a non-photographer tries to critique photographs.
Also, I think the upper corners are too dark. They weigh down the top half of the image, and I don't get the feeling of "looking up" quite as much.
But overall an interesting piece. I'm glad you did something in photoshop without asking for my help. :>
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