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GOOD JOB WATERMELONBREAD GOOD JOB
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Very nice piece overall. I love your colour adjustments and various corrections. That being said please take the rest of this crit with a grain of salt and don't get the impression I didn't like it because I did.

First, the vignetting. I don't think that the darkened corners add anything to the image and altogether cheapen the effect. The reason to use it is a cheap effective way to add contrast to the corners, but when used it often looks amateurish.

Next, I'd like to see a better resolved composition. Despite all the upward motion of the piece, I find myself fairly constantly at the bottom as that's where the highest level of activity is. All-in-all, add some activity to the top edge of the piece or crop out a bit (yes I understand the blurred light sourcing but given the gravitational movement in the piece I still find there to be not enough power on the top to keep me there.)

To be really nit-picky, I could use a little more blurring on the dandelions in the back to give the appearance of a really shallow depth of field. I see some of the blurring already but still some are sharper than they need to be. You also might want to dodge the central dandelion a bit more so that it stands out from the background and really becomes a focal point. Don't go overboard but it could give it that little extra umph.

Besides those I think this is a nice photograph and I look forward to seeing your work in the future!
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Thank you.

For once, one person here on DA actually understands "Advanced Critique Encouraged"

I personally thank you dude. I'll go out and retake this photography tomorrow and try again.

You don't know how much this means to me.
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You're welcome!

I know how bad people can be about critiquing work. It's really annoying when you want to get better and develop your style. Once again, good luck and have fun shooting!
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I honored you in my journal for your time, hopefully some other people will pick up on your good habits =P
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Wow thats amazing how did you do the vingetting? I love it- it looks like you made a holga picture without the holga, how did you do it? :D
Uhm.. I know this is advanced critique but I don't think there's anything I dislike about this one. perhaps the lighting it somewhat too orange-y yellow-y but in another sense the discoloration is really charming.

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I like the colors on this one. Also, it looks like all dandilions are staring into the sky, which I found charming. I love a little personification in nature.

Personally, I would have like to see a slightly sharper angle upwards.... With the stems more pronounced, but not nessicarily the focus... You know what I mean? Gah, this is what happens when a non-photographer tries to critique photographs.
Also, I think the upper corners are too dark. They weigh down the top half of the image, and I don't get the feeling of "looking up" quite as much.

But overall an interesting piece. I'm glad you did something in photoshop without asking for my help. :>

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Thank- you as well C:
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I'll show you today in class.

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